09年10月24日托福独立写作示范

        真题回放:agree or disagree:One of the best method to get teenagers to accustomed to adult life is to get them part-time jobs
  
  点评:本题讨论的是青少年顺利进入成年生活的最佳方式就是参加一份兼职。在题库中我们可以找到的类似题目有:
  
  It has been said, “Not everything that is learned is contained in books.” Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?  
  
  In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details。
  
        开头段:
  
  背景描述+表明观点

  
  Adolescent是从childhood到adult的十分重要的过渡时期,this period of time是孩子们积极储备知识的golden age。Someone oppose that the most principal mission is studying. Instead studying 却没有给我们将这些知识表达出来的技巧。而part-time却可以让我们将学到的知识转化成skill从而make use of what one has learned。And part-time jobs help students focus on their studies是一个 perfect complement. 所以我认为兼职才是青少年进入成年世界最佳的途径。
  
  正文段:
  
  第一段
  
  兼职当中会与到各式各样的问题,而这些问题或多或少与日常学习related。这可以给学生们一个opportunity去practice or check theories they have learned in school. 可以举一个例子比数学在做cashier的帮助。
  
  第二段
  
  兼职工作对于teenagers来说是very precious experiences. 想要适应成年社会首先工作是不可缺少的。而得到 good work的第一步就是有一个excellent resume。而part time job却可以enhance their resumes and build contacts with companies and catch up with the Advanced knowledge of the fields. 比如说accounting 的学生大学毕业后可以回到part time employer to look for a full time position, or approach other employers with good references and cutting-edge work experience.
  
  第三段
  
  兼职工作可以让青少年提前做好进入成年人社会所需要的准备,例如Self-Confident and possessiveness. Knowing that they can do a job well and be paid for it is an important character-building experience that many students put off for too long. Handling their money from part time job也是塑造自制力的最佳方法。
  
  重申观点
  
  The first thing you should do in pre-adult life is getting a part-time job.

        (编辑:胡慧)
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[09年10月24日托福独立写作示范] 文章生成时间为:2012-06-27 02:19:32

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